My Hollow King

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My Hollow King

Postby Murphy » Tue Jan 06, 2004 2:59 pm

Cradling an unspoken fear,
Feel your time drawing near,
Reach your hands to the sky,
Release your hopeless sigh.

You’ve loved and hated,
Blessed and damned,
Yet were never sated,
Through you mountains demand.

Close your eyes and speak your peace,
Your pow’r begins to cease,
Beg on bended knee,
Surrounded by burning debris.

You’ve tortured and cradled,
With strength far beyond fabled,
Been life or death,
All in a breath.

Now you stand before your jury,
Sentenced and found guilty,
Plead for the only thing with worth;
The life that was yours from birth.

You were taken from your throne,
The only thing you’ve ever known,
Now the joyous silver bells ring,
You are gone my hollow king.

For Jaimie.
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Postby Dirge » Tue Jan 06, 2004 4:07 pm

Geez ashlynn.. I'm so jealous of your poem writing skills. your poems have so much emotion and almost a hidden feeling that could only be interpreted by you.. at the same time, your poems almost hold the power of many interpretations, making them very songlike and inspiring. I really am glad your getting into that advanced writing class.. it will do you so much good.. AISHITARU!
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Where do you go when you just dont know, and how do we relight the flame when it's cold?
Why do we dream when our thoughts mean nothing, and when will we learn to control?
I need serenity, In a place where I can't hide. I need serenity, Nothing changes days go by.
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Postby Murphy » Tue Jan 06, 2004 4:12 pm

Oh my gosh Lauren-chan thank you so much! I can't believe I am actully going into a senior class! AHHH! I think it is also an AP class! Wowwie!
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Save Eliot!

I used to be Lain Iwakura but then the voices told me it was too hard to pronounce, so I changed it to Murphy. *Beam*

"i dun wanna be, i dun wanna be me,
i dun wanna be, me anymore. (chorus)

they were throwing at his home,
two glass houses
twenty stones,
fourteen yellow,
six all blue,
could it be worse?
quite doubtful.

(chorus)

two steps forward,
three steps back,
without warning heart attack,
he fell asleep in the snow,
never woke up,
died alone.

(chorus)

please don't dress in black
when you're at his wake
don't go there to mourn
but to celebrate (x2)

(chorus-till end)" -Type O Negative
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Jan 06, 2004 7:16 pm

:sniffle: Whenever I read or listen to something this great I have to cry.

You're writing gets better every time I read it. :)

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Icarus » Tue Jan 06, 2004 11:05 pm

Putting my jaw back together this many times can't be good for it. Otherwise, keep up the good work.
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Postby Murphy » Wed Jan 07, 2004 3:55 pm

[color=darkred] wow! Thank you guys soooo much! ^^ I feel so special1[/color]
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Save Eliot!

I used to be Lain Iwakura but then the voices told me it was too hard to pronounce, so I changed it to Murphy. *Beam*

"i dun wanna be, i dun wanna be me,
i dun wanna be, me anymore. (chorus)

they were throwing at his home,
two glass houses
twenty stones,
fourteen yellow,
six all blue,
could it be worse?
quite doubtful.

(chorus)

two steps forward,
three steps back,
without warning heart attack,
he fell asleep in the snow,
never woke up,
died alone.

(chorus)

please don't dress in black
when you're at his wake
don't go there to mourn
but to celebrate (x2)

(chorus-till end)" -Type O Negative
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Postby EireWolf » Wed Jan 07, 2004 10:21 pm

This is quite good... I got a little chill on the last line. May we know the story behind this piece... please? :lick:
"All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us."
[indent]~~Gandalf, in Fellowship of the Ring[/indent]
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Postby Murphy » Thu Jan 08, 2004 2:35 pm

EireWolf wrote:This is quite good... I got a little chill on the last line. May we know the story behind this piece... please?


Jaimie is my biological father and he has been playing with my emotions for far too long telling me he wants to be a part of my life then not speaking to me for three years then calling me drunk and bitching me out(excuse please but hey its the truth) so yeah i am not allowing him to have that power over me anymore.
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Save Eliot!

I used to be Lain Iwakura but then the voices told me it was too hard to pronounce, so I changed it to Murphy. *Beam*

"i dun wanna be, i dun wanna be me,
i dun wanna be, me anymore. (chorus)

they were throwing at his home,
two glass houses
twenty stones,
fourteen yellow,
six all blue,
could it be worse?
quite doubtful.

(chorus)

two steps forward,
three steps back,
without warning heart attack,
he fell asleep in the snow,
never woke up,
died alone.

(chorus)

please don't dress in black
when you're at his wake
don't go there to mourn
but to celebrate (x2)

(chorus-till end)" -Type O Negative
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Postby EireWolf » Fri Jan 09, 2004 9:20 pm

Murphy wrote:Jaimie is my biological father and he has been playing with my emotions for far too long telling me he wants to be a part of my life then not speaking to me for three years then calling me drunk and bitching me out(excuse please but hey its the truth) so yeah i am not allowing him to have that power over me anymore.


Good for you. Thanks for sharing this with us. :hug:
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