I guess someone had to go - poor Mark. >.>;;Hm, for comments: I wasn't sure I understood how the whole church seemed to know about Francis and how Francis seemed so outspoken about not being a believer. I've never run into Pastor's kids like this. They usually hide their disbelief and agnostic behavior very well and play along with the church scene fairly well. I mean, I've noticed those who weren't saved and would grudgingly sit at the back of youth group, and hate the fact they were being dragged to church once again. But, I don't remember it being the talk of the day. I remember only a close few who would actually know the Pastor's prayers for their children within their own prayer group - such as, with the deacons or elders.
Anyway, I guess I've just never run into this type of incident and that kind of bothered me a little, however, that doesn't mean your story is not realistic. It only "bothered" me slightly.
I love each of your new characters. In fact, every one of the characters you've created have their own distinct personality and in that, I truly appreciated the story more.
I'd have to agree with UC's one grammatical comment. Other than that, and I wish I would have made a note about it, there was only one other place where you might want to re-word it slightly. The grammar looked fine. Your writing was great! The dialogue between Francis and Miranda I thought was believable.
Artwise, you honestly get better and better.
Hm, what else? Inking, backgrounds, screen tones have improved throughout the course of this manga.
Alright, I can't wait to find out what happened to dad. ^_____^
I love you Mave!
To tell the truth, Kireihana, I'm lousy at preaching. I tend to rely on life applications and personal experiences.
