a poem i made for school

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a poem i made for school

Postby Hitokiri » Tue Jan 27, 2004 6:14 pm

We are doing a poem section in our Senior English class and we have to write a poem to read to the class.

I'm not completely done with it. This is something that i ecnountered recently, you see I easily get depressed. Last week, I became depressed (for some reasons I wish not to share) and I went to a church retreat for the weekend and God spoke through me (im no longer depressed and now happy :) ). So in this poem Im explaining how a feel when Im depressed and then what I felt after the retreat.

The Utmost Defiance

Blinded by fear, shaken to my foundations
Confused by this disease named Madness
What's inside of me can never ben known
For a person like you deserves no more then him.
My cloudy vision cannt percieve the shadows.
That eat away at y very grip of reality.
My mind is racing as if on a drug.
But I can feel everything around me.
A gunshot and the smell of sulphur
The pain in my heart is like the pain of mortality
I fall to the floor, blood falling like rain.
The ground opens it's jaws as to eat me up.
Don't make, don't hate me.
I am invincible or at least I thought.
Darkness invades me and violates me.
Will my family miss me, will my friends cry for me?
At my grave as I'm 6 feet under.
No, I will live and live on.
ever and anon
Life is precious, to good to pass up
When ife looks bleak and all is shrouded
Have courgae an dbe strong.
For th epain may seem unbearable but the Son will smile.
The wind will change and you will be lightened.
Day will come and night will hide.
They do love me and so do I.
I will fight on ever even if I am doomed to die.
But my life is now and I will live to the fullest.
Forget the pains and pray for forgiveness.
I will walk under the Son.

and thats all i have, byt he way, this paper is due tommorow morning....I'll work on it during breakfest :lol:
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Postby churchgirl111 » Tue Jan 27, 2004 6:27 pm

Awesome hitokiri...Cool poem. Good imagery. Very indepth..and giving glory to the SOn!! Awesome!!
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This is His testimony: God has given us eternal life and this life is in His Son, He who has the Son of God has Life. He who does not have the Son of God does not have Life.-John

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Postby Hitokiri » Tue Jan 27, 2004 6:40 pm

thanks :)

See, I tend to be to dark from what my friends say so I'm trying to change that. If I would of wrote that earlie rin my life, it wouldn't of been pretty. I might make that into a song possibly.

Anyways, it's cool cause my english teacher is a christian and a huge LOTR fanatic like me :grin:
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