Untitled Literary Work

[Hitokiri]

This is my second attempt at a literary work or a story of my own orginal design. I will post new editions to it as I write it.

Warning: I often like to explore or discuss taboo subjects or offensive. Thier is strong language as well but this is the edited version.

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“I sit here and I wait. I anxiously search and contemplate to what I can never truly relate to. At times, I try and make believe that I am truly Jesus and I can heal the sick. Then, I come to the painful reality I can’t heal my own sickness.â€

[Hitokiri]

Any comments on how it's progressing thus far?

[Esoteric]

Hmmm, well let's see. I have a question first: are you intending this to be a short story or a novel?

If you intend to have this be a longer piece, (or even if you don't) I might suggest drawing out the individual scenes/thoughts a bit more. They switch pretty quickly and by the time [I]“Hey, b******! Let’s play! C’mon, get off ya lazy a**!â€