CAA: Christian Anime Alliance

I've written this story over the past few days, and I would appreciate constructive criticism and feedback on it.

Dance of the Stars

The man leaned on the banister, smiling softly to himself. The setting sun behind him cast a red glow over the field in front of him. Glancing down at his watch, he saw that it was approaching night. He looked over his shoulder towards the setting sun. The quarter circle of fire seemed to take up the entire sky behind him, illuminating the land with rays of flame. A voice below him snapped him out of his reverie. “Hey, Jordan! Down here!â€

It's nicely written with excellent description. I'll confess, I'm so used to encountering some sort of conflict in a story that I kept wondering if something was going to happen at the prom. Perhaps because of that it felt more like a small piece of a larger more comprehensive story about the two. But for being what it is, it's pretty well done.

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Heh. Yeah, my main story that I'm writing is about war, so I have plenty of conflict without adding to any story that sprouts from my romance-drenched mind.