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Life With A Vampire

PostPosted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 12:59 pm
by zelda
i've been writing this for a while now in pieces(so it isn't done yet).
it is a quizilla story so it makes you the main character. i recamend that guys don't read the story because the main character is a girl!!!! lol! as i write the story i'll post the new parts up here. each part is one page long.
here's what i've writtin so far!

the story is about a girl named Noah who walks into a world of vampires, fairies, dragons, ect. and lives with 5 vampires, because she is not allowed to return to the human world. she ends up falling in love with one of the vampires, and ends up also turning into half vampire half human.
so yeah anyways you should read it cuz it's awesome! well, that's what some people tell me anyways...

PART 1
PART 2
PART 3
PART 4
PART 5
PART 6
PART 7
PART 8
PART 9

PostPosted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 3:31 pm
by Photosoph
Sweet! I'll get reading! And I'll edit this post to give you my impressions after I've read it. ^_^

<EDIT>I thought it was pretty cool (this is after reading part 1), however you switched from present to past tense, which was a bit confusing, and I'm not sure why there are check boxes with black writing underneath each section. o_O Also, the black writing tends to get lost in the background. Intentional? I'm not sure. ^_^"
However, I'm interested in what's going to happen, so I'll continue to read through your different parts. At first I was confused as to how to get to the next bit, though, since there didn't seem to be any link from part 1 to part 2.

Hope you don't mind me mentioning these things; I just thought it might be helpful to mention them to you. ^_^"

Anyway, onwards to more reading! \(*_*) ^_^ Wohoo!

<EDIT EDIT> All right, I've read all the parts now! I think your story is cool and creative... and I'd like to learn more about the town/world they live in. ^_^
Aside from that, I think you might need to edit for a few spelling/grammar thingies, but I enjoyed your story. Keep writing!

PostPosted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 7:24 pm
by zelda
yeah my grammer sucks! i'm sorry!
the black words in the black background don't really matter at all. those are just what you're saying or maybe what i'm commenting on. so yeah don't worry about those!
i'm going to be getting more into the town later in the story.
once again SORRY FOR MY SUCKY GRAMMER!!!!! lol!!!!!

PostPosted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:55 pm
by Photosoph
Lol, no problem; everyone's grammar slips now and then. If people can still understand the story, then you're fine. ^_^