Mountain Mist

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Mountain Mist

Postby Rjdreamer » Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:28 pm

My newest poem, please review!

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Her veil is the mist covered mountains
her dress the sparkling sea
the bouquet she holds, the meadow
and in this girl is me

The Groom stands in his armor
as brilliant as the sun
for He is the King of glory
the bride is His chosen one

Oh the galaxy is the chapel
the clouds as carriages draw nigh
Angels sing the chorus
and with joy the bride will cry

The King wipes away every tear
a kind smile on His face
“These vows will last forever,
forever you shall have my graceâ€
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Postby Felix » Mon Jan 23, 2006 9:13 pm

Aw, that's beautiful! I really like it, and very good use of words and metaphor. ^^ Very good job.
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Postby Anna Mae » Sat Mar 04, 2006 11:58 am

Beautiful. I love the imagery. Very good.
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Postby creed4 » Sun Mar 05, 2006 11:52 am

It's great, I can't but think about Christ and the Church
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
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