poems and song lyrics

[Rachel]

As the thread title suggests, this is the place where I'll be posting my poems and song lyrics. The one I'm putting up today is pretty new, I wrote it the other day. Like the day before yesterday. Anyways. I like this one, it's pretty cool I think. Especially with the music, but y'all can't hear that hehe. Here it is:

When Faith Goes Up In Flames

You're trying to be perfect,
but so far it isn't working.
They're always disappointed in you.
If you're going to fall,
why not fall all the way?

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

You don't feel any better
now that you're down.
With guilt and shame
as your only friends.
Thinking just makes it worse.

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

You try to pick yourself up,
and keep on sliding back.
But you do it anyway
because you know
one day you'll make it.

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

And the most beautiful things
always rise from ashes.

[creed4]

The phynix(SP)........ Nice poem, like the hope given at the end good job keep it up

[Rachel]

The phynix(SP)........ Nice poem, like the hope given at the end good job keep it up

Thanks! I'm glad you like it.

I've got one that I'm about to start writing sometime soon (like today if I can remember), and that should be up once it's done.

[Rachel]

Here's a new one that I finished two days ago. I hope y'all enjoy it.

Mistakes have driven us apart,
stubbornness is keeping us there.
With neither acknowledging the obvious,
we could be doomed to failure.

// Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
you know I'd do the same for you.//

They say time will heal,
but months have gone by
and nothing has changed.
No pages have turned.

//Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
you know I'd do the same for you.//

there's nothing to hold onto,
so just say it now.
the elephant in the room is screaming,
everything is over now.

//Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
yoiu know I'd do the same for you.//

The elephant in the room is screaming,
everything is over now.

[Anna Mae]

When Faith Goes Up In Flames

You're trying to be perfect,
but so far it isn't working.
They're always disappointed in you.
If you're going to fall,
why not fall all the way?

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

You don't feel any better
now that you're down.
With guilt and shame
as your only friends.
Thinking just makes it worse.

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

You try to pick yourself up,
and keep on sliding back.
But you do it anyway
because you know
one day you'll make it.

//What a sight to see,
when faith goes up in flames
and burns out of control//

And the most beautiful things
always rise from ashes.

Interesting. I like your message of hope.

[Anna Mae]

Mistakes have driven us apart,
stubbornness is keeping us there.
With neither acknowledging the obvious,
we could be doomed to failure.

// Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
you know I'd do the same for you.//

They say time will heal,
but months have gone by
and nothing has changed.
No pages have turned.

//Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
you know I'd do the same for you.//

there's nothing to hold onto,
so just say it now.
the elephant in the room is screaming,
everything is over now.

//Don't turn and walk away,
go ahead and say you're sorry.
Tell me what I want to hear,
yoiu know I'd do the same for you.//

The elephant in the room is screaming,
everything is over now.

I like the title!

I am not sure that I agree with your chorus as I understand it, however. In the chorus, you ask the other person to go out on a limb. While you do acknowledge that you would do the same, you don't.

Just food for thought.

[creed4]

I agree with anna, It sounds like you need to reach out in this case. It is a good poem Keep up the work.

[Rachel]

Thanks, y'all. I wasn't so sure about the last one myself, I thought it was kind of sappy actually. The title was my favorite part of it. Anyways, here is a new one that I finished a couple of days ago. It is NOT from personal experience.

Broken

All this arguing is making me tired
I can't believe all the things we've said.
Your feelings and mine wre hurt again,
what will it take to forgive?
Well **** this and everything else,
I want to go home and be whole again.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

Your words keep ringing in my head,
and they're pushing me down again.
I can't be without you here.
Fighting never makes any sense.
Nothing against death and monsters,
it's being without you I fear.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

There's still so much to say.
I just want this to be over,
and so I'll never let you go.
Don't let this be the last dance,
or complicate the simple steps.
I can't believe how you love me so.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

[creed4]

Nice, but sad, it makes you sound dependen on the other person

[Rachel]

Excellent! That's exactly what I was going for!

[Anna Mae]

Broken

All this arguing is making me tired
I can't believe all the things we've said.
Your feelings and mine wre hurt again,
what will it take to forgive?
Well **** this and everything else,
I want to go home and be whole again.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

Your words keep ringing in my head,
and they're pushing me down again.
I can't be without you here.
Fighting never makes any sense.
Nothing against death and monsters,
it's being without you I fear.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

There's still so much to say.
I just want this to be over,
and so I'll never let you go.
Don't let this be the last dance,
or complicate the simple steps.
I can't believe how you love me so.

//I never thought it could be like this,
never thought I could feel so sad.
So I'll just remember the good times we've had
and pray to God that we'll be allright.//

'Alright' is with one 'l'.

"Nothing against death and monsters,
it's being without you I fear."
This is confusing at first. Perhaps you could clarify it by adding a "that" between the 'you' and 'I'.

Out of curiosity, why did you write this poem?

[Rachel]

Out of curiosity, why did you write this poem?

I was uh *coughplayingbarbiescough* and uh barbie and ken were having a fight. Not much of a reason, but I think it turned out alright.

[Anna Mae]

That's funny. Yes, I would say that it did indeed turn out alright.

[Rachel]

Man, I totally need to check my own threads more. There should be a new one up soon, I just have to write it out first and all that good stuff.

[creed4]

I know what you mean when you got a poem bursting out

[Rachel]

I really shouldn't post when I have no poems or songs to put up, but this is just to say that I'm about to go write it out finally and eat a piece of pie.

[Anna Mae]

How was the pie?

[Rachel]

Okay, so since it's been a while since I actually posted something worthwhile, I have two new things today. Yes!

Knives and Arrows Just something I was thinking of one day after Bible study class.

Don't take it personally if I don't shake your hand,
I'm far too busy stabbing myself in the back
and undermining everything I've ever wanted
and now there's nothing left for me

Pray for me in the morning,
so that I can make it through th day.
I haven't put my armor on
and so the arrows pass right through
and kill me sooner than anything else,
anything you or I could imagine.

I keep falling off of the road,
the knives and arrows in my back throw me off
and you keep twisting them deeper still.
But I always find my way back on
and I will keep walking.

The music drives me on
and propels my dreams
until they're cut down again.

loaded and tattooed because I'm fed up with people trying to tell me how I should be.

They've got their own plans
of what they want you to be,
plans that you don't care for.
You'd die not to be like them,
don't want to pay for their sins.

//Let's get loaded and tattooed and die for America,
for someone else's ideals.
let's get loaded and tattooed and die for their gain.
Since what we feel doesn't matter,
let's go get loaded and tatooed.//

You can't escape their lies, lies are everywhere.
They're on your tv, in your paper
trying to get you to believe,
to give them pieces of your soul.
Trying to hide what they don't know.

//let's get loaded and tattooed and die for America,
for everyone else's ideals.
let's get loaded and tattooed and die for their gain.
Since what ee feel doesn't matter,
let's go get loaded and tattooed//

And before we know, it's happened.
They stare back at us from our mirrors.
We've become what we hate,
we've become just like them.
Six million more mindless drones going it alone.

//llet's get loaded and tattoed and die for America,
for all their ideals.
let's get loaded and tattooed and die for their gain.
Since what we feel doesn't matter,
let's go get loaded and tattooed//

Oh, and the pie was delicious.

[creed4]

Backsliding? the first one remind me of backsliding. The second a cry to be unconfromed.

[Rachel]

You hit it on the head, creed.

[creed4]

"But be ye Transformed by the renewing of your mind."

[Rachel]

I'm not sure I understand what that's in reference to.

[creed4]

I forgot the refence, but I was refering it to the back sliding poem, that that would be the step to take.

[Rachel]

Ah okay, that makes sense now. I think that verse is somewhere in Romans, but I'm not quite sure.

[creed4]

yes

[Anna Mae]

Romans 12:2

As to Knives and Arrows, my first thought was, "How depressing."

As to Loaded and Tattooed, interesting. I think I'll go with what creed4 said.

[Rachel]

As to Knives and Arrows, my first thought was, "How depressing."

What did you think after that?

untitled I finished this one today. I'm not quite sure what it's about really. It seems to shift topics a few times, but I think it's okay. Anyways.

It's time that we make amends
for the way that we've been.
Because we've got to work things out
if we want to keep on going.

How many people will die for this?
And how many of us will be free?
Can we say that we've lived?
Can we say that we've loved?

And if we confess our sins
how long until we can begin?
This isn't how it should be,
this isn't the road we should be traveling.

ANd so they say, "At least we've got freedom,"
but freedom's a lie they invented
to make us believe we've got something to live for.
There are those of us who know hot it really is,
that when we die we have something to live for.

And so let's make amends
let's love each other and confess
that we have freedom we won't let go.

[creed4]

Mending a relationship,

It make me think of a passage "It is for freedom that christ set us free.

[Anna Mae]

As to Knives and Arrows, my first thought was, "How depressing."

What did you think after that?

It reminds me a lot of a friend that I have. His situation is sad. Then my mind got off on a tangent about him.

There are those of us who know hot it really is,

This line doesn't make sense.